i done battled and shit and been on this forum mad long so fuck it heres a song

[Justice]

Re: i done battled and shit and been on this forum mad long so fuck it heres a song

You've "been here mad long" but is somehow unaware of what clarke actually is AND you wanna colab with him?

[mr.christopher]

Re: i done battled and shit and been on this forum mad long so fuck it heres a song

meh whatever.

[Fake Blanco]

Re: i done battled and shit and been on this forum mad long so fuck it heres a song

Chris, tell Bloopers weigh Jin !

[mr.christopher]

Re: i done battled and shit and been on this forum mad long so fuck it heres a song

huh?

[Fake Blanco]

Re: i done battled and shit and been on this forum mad long so fuck it heres a song

[ame]https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=Dn5Pbug5nRw[/ame]

[mr.christopher]

Re: i done battled and shit and been on this forum mad long so fuck it heres a song

word

[Tony Stanza]

Re: i done battled and shit and been on this forum mad long so fuck it heres a song

[ame="https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0l9kzS_B7gg"]Vince Staples - Big Fish - YouTube[/ame]

[mr.christopher]

Re: i done battled and shit and been on this forum mad long so fuck it heres a song

Vince shit nice.

[Justice]

Re: i done battled and shit and been on this forum mad long so fuck it heres a song

Heres my critiques


- You rap like a corny white guy doing a impression of a even cheesier white guy rapping- basically you make Aster Roth sound like I 20


-The beat is hot garbage juice, it got a goofy af "dont take me seriously" type of vibe.


-Content/subject matter wise it sounds like your stuck in early Slim Shady LP era but is oblivious as all hell that he missed that train by damn near 2 decades.


-Hook is wack... alot of people dont know how to make a hook themselves so that doesn't just apply to you but there are others ways to fill that space that are more better then just rapping something garbage in-between 16's... ill say this though the beat has a big impact on what is the "best" you can do with the hook. It dictates it to a degree i.e. the beat is goofy as fuck so you wasn't left with a whole lot of opinions with what you would of been able to do creatively speaking.



-Lyrically you're seriously lacking, predominantly all one syllables- literally "Minute" and "away" may of been the most complex words you used thats says alot.
Come'on son rapping about karate classes...


- You flow is cringeworthy as a motherfucker i surmise thats why you stuck with the one syllable shit, so it be way easier for you to ride the beat on time

[mr.christopher]

Re: i done battled and shit and been on this forum mad long so fuck it heres a song

all one syllables ? your trippin lol....and minute and away ? wtf are you talking about?



anyway...sorry you couldn't relate.

[mr.christopher]

Re: i done battled and shit and been on this forum mad long so fuck it heres a song

point out ONE bar that was one syllable rhymes.

[Justice]

Re: i done battled and shit and been on this forum mad long so fuck it heres a song

Do you lack in reading comprehension as much as you do as a "emcee"


And no i can't relate to wackness, nor people in disbelief of there own
shortcomings/hot garbage juice-ness.

[mr.christopher]

Re: i done battled and shit and been on this forum mad long so fuck it heres a song

you edited your post to make more sense...don't insult my intelligence..

[mr.christopher]

Re: i done battled and shit and been on this forum mad long so fuck it heres a song

not one bar has single syllable rhyme patterns lmao.

[Justice]

Re: i done battled and shit and been on this forum mad long so fuck it heres a song

point out ONE bar that was one syllable rhymes.

Does mr.wonder bread actually not know wtf a syllable is?



AND he's recording tracks under the guise of "HIPHOP" and watches battle rap?