first attempt at a real track tbh

[John Doe]

Re: first attempt at a real track tbh

post the lyrics imo

[Gwame]

Re: first attempt at a real track tbh

alright it's not my best piece of writing cos it's hella rushed but here goes

pourin more into an empty glass, needin new measures
hearin tunes everyday, simple two steppers
knew whether or not i had potential to do better
i'd shrug it off, fuck it nah refuse effort
i'm not a crew member, little more than a bootlegger
really who am i to go and give a huge lecture?
no real verses i'd just write a few extras
you'd never see it, read about it like news vendors
in the end i never spoke my part
because, well i couldnt go the whole nine yards
thought i was on another level cos i wrote nice bars
dwarfin everyone around me playin snow white's part
i couldnt break the delusion
even when you cut corners you're still makin some new ones
gotta learn to quit stayin put, fakin excuses
i'm wakin up, just gotta basically do this



i don't know if i'm before or past my prime, yeah i'm lackin drive
and nothin tantalises me enough to grab my mind
i need something to distract me, not knowing what exactly
but anything that gets me pacified
sometimes i feel split in half, tryna match the sides
attracted quite to flashing lights, yet i'm camera shy
at my side i got different voices dramatised
the bad guy's at my shoulder like a pantomime

[Basse Bisex]

Re: first attempt at a real track tbh

Gay

[Dr. Ache]

Writing aight ill peep dis when I get back home breh

[Timmy]

Re: first attempt at a real track tbh

pretty good writing u needa step ur delivery/swag level up on the verses tho

i like the hook alot tho

[winsor]

Re: first attempt at a real track tbh

sexy accent tbh.

[Gwame]

Re: first attempt at a real track tbh

pretty good writing u needa step ur delivery/swag level up on the verses tho

i like the hook alot tho

yeah prob, i had/have no idea how to deliver a verse like that... cos it aint specifically positive or negative, haha

[Gwame]

Re: first attempt at a real track tbh

bumping cos it's actually decent tbh

[larry word]

Re: first attempt at a real track tbh

no hate but did u take more than 20 mins to write that first verse?

also don't bother trying to mix this imo, what kinda mic are you on atm?

[Gwame]

Re: first attempt at a real track tbh

no hate but did u take more than 20 mins to write that first verse?

also don't bother trying to mix this imo, what kinda mic are you on atm?

first off, no, this is more just me tryna get the hang of recording, not me tryna improve my writing. that verse was light

i didnt mix it, but a friend did... it's a samson c01u if i remember right. entry level usb condensor mic

[Gwame]

Re: first attempt at a real track tbh

new
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refuse
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all rhymes to u but good/food dont?

didn't see this post til now, nor half the ones you made... prob a livetopic fuck up

and yeah they have the same "ooh" sound in all them... good has a "uhhh" sound smh

[larry word]

Re: first attempt at a real track tbh

mmmmm yeah maybe it's just me but i don't think it's even worth fuckin w the quality on that mic. wait til you can hop on a better setup. but yea practicing recording is good, it's not easy peasy

[Gwame]

Re: first attempt at a real track tbh

pretty much, i've gotten a few offers of studio time but nothing near me unfortunately...

[paddy]

Re: first attempt at a real track tbh

you should have a hook like

when we reach the club they gonna all kno
these chicks all tryin to put on a show
and they all checkin me out wen i go
so sing it loud one time PO TA TO

PO TA TO PO TA TO PO TA TO

ONE MORE TIME PO TA TO

[Gwame]

Re: first attempt at a real track tbh

top 10 slap of 2011


good shit gwame

i got that no.1 xmas chart spot in the bag... the trap bag

paddy i'll do a potato anthem at some point, but apparently my first track was supposed to be a dublin struggle song